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Rusty

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My heart is of rich, bright copper old
And in it contained love and happiness
It's not my smile or eyes that are bold
But the joyous soul shines its goodness

And then I met him, a mysterious guy
Of high status, an aristocrat if you will
He's charming, majestic like the sky
His grey eyes always gave my spine a chill

I don't know what lured me into him
Perhaps it was the danger that he emits
Little did I know he was nothing but grim
And he sucked out my life when we kiss

Heart and soul turned cold, a hard metal shell
I couldn't repair it no matter what I tried to do
The love was replaced with something from hell
Anger, sadness, misanthropy only grew and grew

My tears, like rain, touches my metal heart- now red
It's rusting away, until one day I must dispose of it
It is no longer beautiful, no longer pure, just dead
I'm broken and tainted with vileness of an evil spirit

Like a rusted robot, I need someone to fix me, a repair
Please clean me and help me rid of the painful memories
The ugly rust marks me, a deep scar too hideous to bear
Help before I solve it myself, the unforgivable remedy
This poem is for a prompt from Poetic-State-Of-Mind This is a pretty interesting poem I made. How do you guys interpret this one? :D
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FruitnCreme's avatar
well i think it's pretty obvious she got involved in an abusive relationship with someone.i don't know if she broke up with him and still feels bad about herself,or just didn't make any move towards ending the relationship and is stuck in her cage of negativity. but she's focusing on only her loss and not thinking about how she can escape and move forward.

in the last stanza,it's very clear that she's pleading for someone to help her before she commits suicide ("Help before I solve it myself, the unforgivable remedy")
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how was that interpretation?